I find myself in agreement with Dave about the oversharpened, contrasty look. As I have previously concurred with him on his views about your other shot of Wally, that alone is cause for concern.
It's an effect which might have some potential for the right subject, but is not especially flattering the way it is done here. In particular, the pixellation is very off putting. Also, the reflections which are partially obscuring both of Wally's eyes look rather odd, his left eye especially.
It is an unusual viewpoint for a portrait, shot from above and the subject looking away from the camera, the crop just skimming the top of his head. This suggests to me that you might have chosen to present it this way to try and salvage something from an awkward pose which did not work as a straight image. Extremes of manipulation have their place provided that such processing adds something, but it is not a panacea.
An interesting experiment and definitely one worth trying, but for me at least, it has not suceeded on this occasion.
