What Happens When The Music Stops?

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What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby davidc » Wed 12 Sep 2012, 11:34

Third and final entry for next week. C&C please!

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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby Nina » Wed 12 Sep 2012, 16:09

I think this is a excellent candid and the title is inspirational. In my opinion the composition/balance could be improved so here's my quick edit to illustrate how I would present this one.

I also selectively lightened the shadows on the girls face and black top and added a little light vignette to concentrate the eye on the subject.
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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby davidc » Wed 12 Sep 2012, 16:11

I can see the difference the tighter crop makes, but do you not think that the extra space on the left shows the path "the music" has taken so far?
I'm still torn between your pic height and mine though :)
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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby Nina » Wed 12 Sep 2012, 16:19

I see what you're saying about the "path", but I don't think that the even length of the sinus wave either side of the figure works as well as it might. Only my opinion and is of course subjective. :)
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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby davidc » Wed 12 Sep 2012, 17:00

I really like the selective shadow lightening - you'll have to show me how you did that!
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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby Mike Farley » Thu 13 Sep 2012, 19:10

Good timing, David, with the girl's head neatly coinciding with the top of the wave. I agree with Nina that the slight crop on the right helps, but I would probably not go in quite so tight on the left, which would allow the girl to be aligned on the left hand vertical third. Overall, well seen.
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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby davidc » Fri 14 Sep 2012, 10:30

For the crop I posted, I did deliberately crop it so she just about sits on the thirds, with the "music line" sitting on the top third, almost. Close enough :) Definitely appreciate the feedback and changing the crop for this picture is driving me crazy, I've tried so many options!

r.e. the timing, I spotted the line and camped out just across the street waiting for people to pass under it. This was the best shot and most fitting once I noticed her headphones. Stood there for about an hour!
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Re: What Happens When The Music Stops?

Postby Mike Farley » Sun 16 Sep 2012, 14:53

davidc wrote:r.e. the timing, I spotted the line and camped out just across the street waiting for people to pass under it. This was the best shot and most fitting once I noticed her headphones. Stood there for about an hour!


That's a classic approach and one taken by many togs when shooting street. Henri Cartier Bresson was an exponent of this technique, one of photography's most well known lurkers!
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